Haley

I like the way you have added a lot more information to your story and that you have more than one problem. I am wondering about the part where you said Melisha was too late and didn't kiss Camren then you said he woke because she kissed him. Can you check this bit.

Hamburger squash - Yum it sounds very interesting.
I really like the way you have used more native birds to help save Melisha. Good on Tia for being so clever.