Starsha

What an exciting story Starsha! You have created lots of different places (some really scary stuff) and lots of characters. To make it even easier for the reader to keep up, I suggest you reread some of your sentences and make some of them shorter and add a few small words where you have missed them out. This will make it even more enjoyable for others to read. I look forward to seeing how your story develops and what the wicked stepmother does with her potion. - Mum