Starsha

Gosh Starsha
You have written a lot. I like the way you have used some very descriptive words to describe the evil stepmother and I think I can see where your story is heading but I'm a bit confused about the start. It seems to jump around a bit and I'm not sure why you have the spooky forest in Hamilton then everything moves to New Plymouth. I wondered if you could have explained how they had heard about this other mountain that sounds magical and a lovely place to live.

What do you think?