Sunday, June 7, 2009

Jean Paul

Hi Jean Paul

I liked the way you have made the changes to your story that explain your setting better. I was wondering how the goldfish got to the stream. Did it swim up through the rapids of the river that the stream flows from?
How did the witch know the goldfish was there and why did the witch want to kill it?

I am looking forward to reading your next part of the story.

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