Jared

Hi Jared

I like the beginning of your story. I can imagine the cave with the bats in it and there being lots of bones sticking out of the walls and the floor of the cave. I was wondering why you can see a dead town. Where is it and is it important to the story? Do you have to go through it to get out. How did the guardians find the cave? What are they going to find in the cave?

I am looking forward to reading more of your story.